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And couldn’t take my eyes off her. She had jet-black hair, and a jean jacket and she was wearing bright yellow sunglasses inside and chewing gum. She looked extremely bored, too.
Making a Move on a Movie Star
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Mike Butler
Author, D. Denise Dianaty
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Apr 5, 2024
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Editorial recommendation: I recommend you rephrase this to show these details instead of telling them. Describe movement that attracted him and revealed the details.
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Written by Author, D. Denise Dianaty10.4K Followers
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Artist, Poet, author, wife & mom May my epitaph be "She reflected love into the world."
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